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some people think that prison sentences should not be used in dealing with criminals.Education and jobs,training should be used instead.To what extent do you agree or dis agree.

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In recent times
its
it is
it's
 often said that education
,
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,
training and jobs ought to be used in handling criminals rather than the use of prison sentences.In my essay I will discuss these points and draw my conclusion. On one hand the rate
of increase in criminal
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increase in criminal
 activities among the youth has increased in alarming proportion.
This
 might be largely due to the deteriorating
economy which
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economy, which
 is a consequence of bad government policies and lack of the political will to implement any.In my
country
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country, for
for
example kidnapping
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example, kidnapping
,
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,
armed robbery
,
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,
fraud has increased majorly among the youthful population and had led to
increase
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increases
 in criminal activities and subsequent increase in arrest by the security agencies.The courts have never been
busy
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busier
more busy
 than in recent times.Most of the convicted criminals
has had
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have had
 to find their
way
 into correctional facilities with all their proceeds of crime confiscated by government.These massive arrests had
also
 lead to drastic reduction in crime and criminal acts
,
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,
It is not
gain saying
take exception to
gainsaying
 that these criminals are
highly
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more highly
educated but
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educated, but
 rather than to deploy their knowledge into useful activities they chose to do
otherwise
.
On the other hand
 the use of education and training is
veritable
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a veritable way
way
 of dealing with criminals.It had
also
 been found that most of the arrested criminals do not know the
consequencies
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
consequences
consequence
 of
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 of their activities
on
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in
 the larger society.
Hence
 the establishment of vocational training
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 and subsequent granting of soft loans after the completion of
trainingwill help
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training helped
training will help
 at least
decongest
 the already filled prisons.These criminals
,
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,
some of their hideouts are known to the society and they can be engaged in a
way
 to change
mindset
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the mindset
 towards becoming responsible citizens in the country. In conclusion societies need to come up with policies that will encourage job
creation for
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creation, for
 those who are willing to be
responsible but
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responsible, but
 prison sentences will go a long
way
 in removing and punishing criminals
,
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,
this
 will serve as
deterent
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a deterrent
deterrent
deterrents
 to others who would tow the path of criminality.
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