it is impossible to help all people in the world so governments should focus on people in their own countries. to what extent do you agree or disagree

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Many people claim that the governments should look after their own citizens

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of people from other parts of the world which is agreed by many people all over the world by that way, safety can be achieved.

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with, taking care of people in a specific country is the duty of every government to prevent many disasters like an increasing number of homeless people in local communities that leads to living under bridges or in metro stations. In

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case, the government should assist the citizens by providing shelter and free food.

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, the number of unemployed people is increasing with high rate

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, authorities should take care of unemployment seriously to reduce the number of jobless people.

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reduces effectively crime rates resulting from lack money, which make their country safer.Another purpose of the governments is to improve the living standard of their own countries. on the opposite han

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, people who migra

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or even visit other countries should be taken into account

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is because we are all humans and from humanity, we should help each other in anytime anyone needs help so I think that the government should be responsible for the people who are only in their own boarder only even if that person is of other nationality

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

213 words

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it is impossible to help all people in the world so governments should focus on people in their own countries. to what extent do you agree or disagree

Include an introduction and conclusion

You work for an international company and you need some time off to attend a family celebration. Write a letter to the company’s manager. In your letter: give details of the celebration explain the reason why you need time off suggest a way to have your work done during that time.

There are fewer controls over the designs and construction of home and office buildings. So, people can build them however they like. Do the advantages of this outweighs the disadvantages?

The linegrahp below shows the differences in the consumption of three fast food among Australian teenager. Write a report describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words.

Some prents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys ?

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be compulsory in high school programmes (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). Do you agree or disagree?