Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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It is a highly debatable issue whether advertising should be promoted or not. On the one hand it keeps us up-to-date on what is new in the market.

However some

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However, some

people feel that advertising promotes consumerism. In

this

essay we will discuss how advertising is more beneficial than it is harmful. Advertising has made our life easier by keeping us informed about the new products being launched in the market.

Nowadays if

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Nowadays, if

you are going out to buy a phone or a headphone you don't need to do extensive research on

internet

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the internet

before hand

being ahead of time or need

beforehand

. We are already aware of the new and improved models of different phones thanks to their advertisements. But sometimes, advertisements make us pile up things we may not actually need. We get lured by sales techniques

such

as one-on-one scheme or Buy-2-Get-1-Free. These kind of schemes

make

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makes

us buy things we may not ever actually use. Because of advertisements, sometimes we buy what tempts us without the insight of what we actually need. Impressive images, videos or captions are bound to leave an impression on us.

For

example media

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example, media

is flooded with the advertisements of beauty products that claim to make you fair in a few days. Women and men both are equally crazy about

such

products and buy them without consulting a dermatologist

first

However

, the benefits of advertisement

outweighs

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outweigh

it's

of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"

its

disadvantages. To put it in a nutshell, I would say that advertisements

promotes

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promote

quantity but

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quantity, but

they tell us about quality as well. The onus lies on us to recognise what we actually need and what we don't.

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263 words

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

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Topic Vocabulary:

encourage
persuade
manipulative
unnecessary
excessive
artificial needs
desires
consumers
oversaturation
impulse buying
financial problems
inform
educate
features
benefits
innovations
raise awareness
social issues
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