Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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It is a highly debatable issue whether advertising should be promoted or not. On the one hand it keeps us up-to-date on what is new in the market.
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However some
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However, some
people feel that advertising promotes consumerism. In
this
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essay we will discuss how advertising is more beneficial than it is harmful. Advertising has made our life easier by keeping us informed about the new products being launched in the market.
Nowadays if
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Nowadays, if
you are going out to buy a phone or a headphone you don't need to do extensive research on
internet
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the internet
before hand
being ahead of time or need
beforehand
. We are already aware of the new and improved models of different phones thanks to their advertisements. But sometimes, advertisements make us pile up things we may not actually need. We get lured by sales techniques
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as one-on-one scheme or Buy-2-Get-1-Free. These kind of schemes
make
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makes
us buy things we may not ever actually use. Because of advertisements, sometimes we buy what tempts us without the insight of what we actually need. Impressive images, videos or captions are bound to leave an impression on us.
For
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example media
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example, media
is flooded with the advertisements of beauty products that claim to make you fair in a few days. Women and men both are equally crazy about
such
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products and buy them without consulting a dermatologist
first
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.
However
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, the benefits of advertisement
outweighs
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outweigh
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
disadvantages. To put it in a nutshell, I would say that advertisements
promotes
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promote
quantity but
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quantity, but
they tell us about quality as well. The onus lies on us to recognise what we actually need and what we don't.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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