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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the current technical era, the technology
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 shows its shadow in the learning area
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Accept space
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Fewer
 masses hold that the electronic gadgets have many benefits for the students, but others are on the opposite side. I firmly stand by the given view. In my piece of writing, I shall discuss both views with my agreement. More importantly, a sole advantage of the usage of zip past modes of teaching subjects
help
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helps
 the students to dig deep about any topic. To illustrate, with the help of the advance study machines, the students come across a plenty of views or links about one task, which uplifts the mental horizon of the little ones to gain much more information. Apart from
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, the young generation is very much interested to use screens
,
Accept space
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and perhaps, the learners explore the study material in play way method. So, I think the computers play a vital role in an education development. On turning to the harmful effects side, the health of the students
is widely get
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is widely getting
has widely got
has widely gotten
 negative impacts.
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, the children sit long hours
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in front
 of
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the monitors
, which automatically leads to the weak eye sight problem. Eventually, the small ones have to wear the glasses according to the suggestion of the doctors.
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, the youngsters provide dim light
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for
 reading the book. The hard paper reading is about to erase in the life of the modern generation. In my opinion, the introduction of advance study resources
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has
 numerous harmful impacts, but it
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 blesses to unlock the door of the updated versions of an education for the future of the world.
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