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.Some people believe that success comes from hard work. Others think that it has to do with luck. Which opinion do you agree with and why? Give details and examples to support your opinion

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Everyone wants to be successful in life. Some believe that
success
 comes from hard
work
others
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Others
 think that
luck
 is important and plays a decisive role to have a successful career. I agree with those who think
luck
helps but
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helps, but
also
 need to
work
 hard to get good results. In
this
 essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will analyse and give my opinion on
this
 topic. For many
success
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successes
comes
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come
 only if you
work
 hard. I agree with
this
 opinion because
success
need
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needs
 hard
work
 and
luck
 is not the dominant aspect to gain it.
Success
 is a set of determination, commitment and good motivation and only with
this
 element you can get it. If you
work
 hard, you will never receive disappointments. For
me being
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me, being
 a rich man or powerful man without hard
work
 is never a
success
.
Also students
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Also, students
,
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,
if they study and
work
 hard, they will never get bad results. I know
businessman
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a businessman
 who had nothing before, and after working hard for years they got what they wanted. Many famously successful people have begun from small origins
,
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,
for example
 Maradona.I
also
 think that those who get what they want thanks to
luck
 will never have the same satisfaction as those who get it working
hard
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harder
.
In
contrast people
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contrast, people
 who get what they want without working hard and only thanks to
luck
,
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,
they do not struggle and get what they want with ease.
Luck
also
 helps you if you do not have economic opportunities. The same applies to the knowledge that you can have in the field of
work
.
Also
 the qualities that a person can have and that lead to
success
 are a fortune that not everyone has. I think
luck
 can
help but
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help, but
 at some point it fades and the skills come into play. In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
 think that
success
 is not only about
luck but
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luck, but
 especially of
work
 hard
,
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,
and in any case if you
work
 hard you still get a result
,
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,
without relying on an uncertain as
luck
. What happens in
future
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the future
 will depend on what you decide to do and how you do it. I believe, that it is more important working
hard
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harder
 than waiting for
luck
 to have a successful career.
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