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Traffic jam is a problem in many towns and cities. People believe that this can be done by making roads wider. Do you agree or disagree?

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transportation
Suggestion
Transportation
 congestion has become a major problem for all townships and metropolis. Some people argue that
this
 problem can be solved by making the roads wider.
However
, I think that other measures like improving public
transport
 system can reduce the service jams.
Firstly
, we have to understand the main cause of
transport
 jams
then
 a solution can be found out.
transport
Suggestion
Transport
 congestion is directly proportional to the number of vehicles on the road, the majority of them are personal vehicles used to commute from one point to another, either for work or for other purposes. People prefer to travel on their personal vehicles due to its convenience and comfort. But due to
this
 trend during peak hours there are lots of vehicles on the roads which causes transit jams. If a person is in an emergency he has to face a lot of difficulty in
such
 a situation. Looking at the above reasons, some people say that wider roads will reduce
transport
 congestions.
However
, in my opinion, if the public
transport
 system is improved, it will be much more useful for people to commute to their desired destinations. Public
transport
 like underground railways, metro and bullet trains will not only save time and hassle during the commute, but
also
 saves a lot of money as public shipping is able to carry more people in a single time and problem of road congestion will
also
 be vanished. Public transportation should be made comfortable and cheap, subscriptions should be given to the public, so that they prefer it over their own personal vehicles. To conclude, I think that widening the roads is not the only solution for freight congestions. Government should focus on improving the public shipment system and make a person's habit of using these modes of transportation rather than personal vehicles. It will not only eradicate transit related issues, but
also
 environment will be clean due to less emissions from vehicles.
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