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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? What are the effects on society and family life?

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In our modern society, there is a growing trend among couples to plan pregnancy at an older
age
. In my opinion, financial status and lifestyle changes are two of the main reasons behind
this
 tendency. In
this
 essay, I shall critically examine the given topic and outline its effects on the society. To start with, at present time, many people are unable to have kids at a young
age
 due financial restrictions. They may not earn enough income at the start of their career that could allow them to sustain a family.
Thus
, forcing them to postpone their family planning for a later time.
In addition
, today's lifestyle, demand people to travel and relocate frequently to various cities or places for better employment opportunities and living standards.
Therefore
, leaving little to no time to have children, and
then
 care for them;
this
 often results in people deciding to have a child at a much older
age
.
Consequently
, there is a multitude of detrimental effects on the society of
this
 movement.
Firstly
, as more people are having kids later in life, there is an increasing number of pregnancy complications among older parents due to
age
 related changes in the human body.
Secondly
, parents may not have enough energy and mental strength to handle the problems and demands of the children, after a certain
age
.
Thus
, causing various stress related issues and family disputes. In conclusion,
this
 is a topic which raises many questions in the contemporary life. After a thorough analysis of the subject, I am inclined to say that the positive aspects of planning pregnancy at a young
age
 surpass the negative points.
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