The first chart below shows how energy is used in and average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which resulted from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in and average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which resulted from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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There are two charts that are shown in the figure. The first chart shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The
second
chart shows the greenhouse
gas
emissions
, which result from
this
energy use.
Firstly
, we can see that 42% of heating cover up the whole energy use of Australian household
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
show examples
resulted in 15% of greenhouse
gas
emissions
.
Moreover
, 30% of
power
Add an article
the power
show examples
used is water heating
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
show examples
increases to 32% in
gas
emissions
. On top of that, we can see here that refrigeration, other appliances, lighting,
cooling
Correct word choice
and cooling
show examples
are all increasing by 2 times
of
Change preposition
apply
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their percentage in power use or 1%. In conclusion, the most efficient way to operate power in Australian
household
Fix the agreement mistake
households
show examples
is heating because it decreases the greenhouse
gas
emissions
effect.
Therefore
, the side effects of
this
is
Change the verb form
are
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less than
other
Correct article usage
the other
show examples
features given.
On the other hand
, cooling can
also
be a good feature since it just increases by 1%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words gas, emissions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average Australian household
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Energy consumption
  • Activities
  • Heating
  • Cooling
  • Water heating
  • Appliances
  • Lighting
  • Standby
  • Percentage (%)
  • Consumption patterns
  • Efficiency
  • Emissions impact
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy-saving measures
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Electricity
  • Natural gas
  • Emissions breakdown
  • Energy audit
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation
  • Mitigation strategies
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