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Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea, some think they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree? Give examples of your knowledge.

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Global
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 environment faces many hazards these days;
however
, pollution caused by
plastic
bags
 is one of its major threats. It is argued that banning
of
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these kinds of products can reduce their detrimental effects on the globe. Personally, I totally agree with
this
 opinion and I will
further
 explain the reasons below. Admittedly,
plastic
bags
 have many hazardous effects on the ecosystem of the planet. One of these hazards is that when they settle down in the ground, animals swallow them by mistake and in
turn
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 they block their digestive system.
Consequently
, they do not eat well, lose weight and eventually they die. In India,
for example
, on surgical inspection of
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the caws
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caws
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caws'
caw's
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 digestive system, more than fifty
plastic
bags
 have been found in only one animal.
This
 explains how these
bags
 pose a threat
on
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 the livestock.
Nevertheless
,
plastic
bags
 are washed with
rain fall
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rainfall
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 in the sewage system of the big cities.
This
 will either block the stream, disrupting the flow and damaging the
infra structure
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infrastructure
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 or continue to pass to rivers or oceans.
As a result
, they shred into micro shreds which are eaten by aquatic creatures.
This
 leads to the same
above mentioned
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 digestive disturbances
to
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 those creatures and
kill
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 them.
According to
National
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 Geographic channel, hundreds of species are at risk of extinction owing to the dire effect of
plastic
bags
. In conclusion, having presented some drastic consequences of using
plastic
bags
 on our environment, in my opinion, if these products are not banned in the near future,
further
 damage to
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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 is expected.
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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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