Please complete the personal statement IN YOUR OWN WORDS. You must submit the personal statement in English in the space provided below. Describe, in no more than 500 words, your reasons for applying for your chosen course of study and the ways in which you expect your study experience to make a difference to your life and those around you.

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I grew up in an environment where children were not properly cared for. In West Africa, where I was born and raised, there are children dying of curable diseases. In
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century, it was surprising that some diseases can still cause deaths and deformities in the lives of
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new generation. It’s been a very sad experience growing up seeing younger generations not getting proper health
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due to improper
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and poor facilities. It brings me to tears and I have always asked myself questions on how I can fill the gap and provide my own quota to what is lacking and give my own contribution to the young beautiful souls. I chose to pick up
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role of being a professional nurse for the future generation to provide
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and support
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necessary not only for the Nigerian children but to the rest of the world. I grew my passion to supply the
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needed for a common child to grow with the basic and equity in mind without any prejudice either you are in America or deepest part of the world where they lack adequate healthcare facilities. I got into the United States with the heart to get trained in
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field and become a professional to be able to give back to the society and to the lives of the oncoming generation so as to ensure they have the best treatment and are well cared for in terms of health
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. I joined Concorde career institute where I studied to become a licensed vocational nurse (LVN) so as to be able to pursue my dreams and ambitions. During
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period, I gathered various experiences from individuals in the field and graduated. I have had about 8 years work experience. I believe it is time to proceed to a higher level in my career by acquiring more knowledge to be able to add more values to nursing field and
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put my passion to work. I have worked with the elderly and children with different diagnoses ranging from cerebral palsy, pts with a tracheotomy and vent, G-button, diabetics etc. Over the period of time, I have developed more passion, abilities and qualities. I have realized over the years that planning and patience are essential in taking
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of the sick. A positive feedback from the children and their parents gives me joy and courage to want to do more for them and watch them improve. I cannot wait to achieve my
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dream with University of Arkansas by pursuing Bachelors of Science in Nursing.
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