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The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.

The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.
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The map illustrates the consideration of constructing
new
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a new
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 educational institute in two different positions
of
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in
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 Canterbury
town
.
Overall
, the first possible
site
located
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is located
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 in the rural area near Sturry
town
,
while
 the other
situated
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is situated
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 in the urban area
which
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where
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 no infrastructure passed through. In the first
school
site
 (S1), a
school
 is located to the west of the
town
center
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centre
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. A
school
 may erect
on
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in
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 the countryside and just under the main road to Sturry
town
, which has
total
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a total
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 population of 7000 inhabitants.
Moreover
, a university
located
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is located
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 to the north of Canterbury. Turning to the
second
site
 (S2), the location of
the
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apply
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school
 is situated
on
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in
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 the city
center
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centre
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.
However
, no transportation can access
across
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apply
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the
town
. The
site
 is 7km far from Chartham city, which
have
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 4500 people in the number of residents.
Furthermore
,
housing
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the housing
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 area of Canterbury was built around the prohibition of traffic zone.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, site, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • contrast
  • location
  • accessibility
  • residential areas
  • facilities
  • traffic
  • transportation
  • environment
  • cost
  • feasibility
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