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Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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 it is sometimes thought that it is a parental responsibility to skill a new generation to be successful socialized, other people say that a faculty surrounding would be a perfect teacher. In my opinion, I consider that family members helps pupils to learn be the most positive member of the society in a convenient way. On the one hand, some people think that a parent upbringing is necessary to help youth to be more social.
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, a parent's behaviour would be a model for their children in the relationship with the surrounding people.
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, Keit Middleton is a perfect model to her daughter in zooming of keeping a close distance with others.
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, a right manner of children to holding themselves in a different situation could be taught by parents.
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, it is often believed that it is better place to gain the social skills is a school. It means in the
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 children learn by analysing others behaviour and step by step they would build an own vision, how to deal with the others sufficiently.
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, many famous politicians have their vision how to be the best team member from their school.
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, a relationship which was built in the school, helps teens to be more compete in the social life. In conclusion, while other people may vary in their opinion, I think that parents should take the key role in the children's life adaptation in society with a positive impact.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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