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Many people believe that countries should produce food for the whole population and import as little food as possible. Agree/disagree?

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Food
 production is a matter of not only national economy, but
also
 quality of life for the citizens. Some assert that nations should grow crops to feed their population and limit their
food
import
. In my opinion, heading to a more self-sufficient
food
 supply is a pathway to sustainable development, but it is not always the case for some countries. On the one hand, there are some advantages of developing
food
 for people in their vernacular market.
Firstly
, locally grown products do not need to be transported for a long time and travel thousands of miles,
therefore
, it is more likely that they will not contain harmful chemical preservations in order to keep their fresh attributes and nutritional quality.
As a result
,
food
 which is directly transported from farmers to markers is healthier.
Secondly
, in connection with limited transit, its costs may be minimal which in consequence may lead to creation of savings which can be used to increase development of the local farms.
Finally
, preventing the unemployment may be another significant benefit by securing a greater number of workplaces.
For example
, Greece is one of the successful country, that avoids
import and
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import, and
 still does not have a high range of cutback.
On the other hand
, there are several reasons for importing goods.
To begin
 with, it gives opportunity to consume a wide range of products, which often contains a variety of vitamins, which local foodstuff may not have.
In addition
, due to diversity of climate not all kinds of
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Accept space
..
 .
grow
Suggestion
Grow
 throughout the year. Thanks to
import
 people can eat fresh, nutritious vegetables
anytime
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any time
, which can enrich their diet. In conclusion,
although
 it is beneficial to
import
 goods from different countries, it is crucial to produce
food
 for residents and put a strict limit on
import
 because of improving the state of the budget and guarantee of a healthy diet.  Check the Essay New Essay
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