More and more people are using computer and electric devices to access information, therefore there is no need for printed books, magazines and newspapers on paper. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that technological developments lead to the

less

something that is lost

loss

of some issue products like books, magazines and newspaper. I partly agree with

this

assertion, while it may be correct in some cases of society, others seem to be unaffected by

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the Internet

and the modern world. On the one hand, the advances in technology have certainly contributed to the development of human life. In

this

case, it is obtaining knowledge.

Instead

of spending a long time to find what they need in a book, people can discover exactly what they want by searching it.

Furthermore

, hundred of results can assist people to have the comparison between the news. While a significant number of figures are updated everyday on the Internet, the knowledge in the book books or magazines just keep informed in the period of time.

For example

, students are required to deepen the lectures by watching their lesson on

Youtube

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YouTube

or reading electronic newspaper related,

Consequently

this

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seasible

showing reason or sound judgment

sensible

solution to make them grow into modern citizens. On the other, printed products still necessary and meaningful in many ways.

First

, most of successful individuals achieve their accomplishment by reading books custom. They reckon that some books like Enchantment by Guy Kawasaki or How to win friends

anh

in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go

and

influence people

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Dale Carnegie is highly epoch, which teach them how to stand up after each failure and overcome their limits.

Secondly

, reading printed newspaper every

morning still

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morning, still

the beneficial habit to supplement

people

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peoples'

person's

peoples

awareness. It

also preventing

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also prevents

is also preventing

them from some diseases created by

greenlight

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Greenlight

of electric devices. In conclusion,

although

tech products are really

convenients

suited to your comfort or purpose or needs

convenient

for modern life, printed products can not disappeared due to their benefits.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

278 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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