Today’s schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Suggestion
It
is undeniable that
one
of
most controversial issues
Suggestion
the most controversial issues
in
this
ever-changing society relates to the new teaching
method
that teach the student how to spend
money
properly. I am of those people who support the idea that
this
brings many benefits for the
aldoscents
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
adolescents
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
do believe that it can impact the students. On the
one
hand, there are many reasons why the student should learn to be
reponsible
worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable
responsible
for their finance.
First
of all, the youngsters will be able to use
money
Suggestion
the money
without allowances from their parents. It means the parents will not be
worry
Suggestion
worried
about these children due to
the good
Suggestion
the best
teaching
method
.
Moreover
,
this
teaching
method
is more interesting than any the core subjects in school. The teenagers are willing to learn
this
subject but
Accept comma addition
subject, but
for exhausting a few hours.
For example
, the students taught to spend
money
properly find no difficulty in
this
harsh life.
Therfore
Suggestion
Therefore
,
this
teaching
method
is very useful for these individuals.
On the other hand
, the demerits that
brings
Suggestion
bring
to
Suggestion
in
the teens
are outweighed
Suggestion
outweigh
the advantages
one
.
This
is a waste of time because these children need to learn
enormouly
extremely
enormously
the compulsory
curiculum
an integrated course of academic studies
curriculum
curriculums
curricula
to be succeed in their future.
This
means Maths, Literature,
Physical
Suggestion
Physics
and so on play a vital role in the student's study.
Furthermore
, these subjects have multiform.
For instance
, Maths is the most engaging
one
which improve the creativity and
potentail
existing in possibility
potential
of
caculating
passing from one to another
circulating
calculating
. Since
one
problem can be solved with a lot of ways. In
concusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think that there is no doubt of the
benefis
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
benefit
of learning to spend
money
,
also
the drawbacks are overriding importance
.
Accept space
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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