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The range and quality of food that we can buy has changed because of technological and scientific advances. Some people regard this change as an improvement while others believe this is harmful. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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Opinions are divided on whether changes in the range and quality of
food
 brought by advances in science and technology are detrimental or beneficial to
humans’
Suggestion
human
 health.
Although
this
 development is not without its advantages, the drawbacks can be overwhelming. There are some benefits related to various types of
food
 being modified by technological methods.
First
, people from different parts of the world can now enjoy a much wider variety of foods thanks to the improvements in refrigeration and transportation. Take Sushi
for example
, a traditional Japanese dish
that is
 now popular worldwide because of the introduction of new freezing technologies helping seafood like tuna or shrimp stay fresh longer.
Second
, farmers are now
benefited
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benefiting
benefitting
by
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from
 genetically-modified crops which are
more high
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higher
-yielding and more resistant to pests.
This
 has not only improved many farmers’ well-being but
also
 brought a significant change in the quantity of
food
 to customers.
On the other hand
, not all technological advancements and changes
on
Suggestion
in
food
 production are of advantages (and
therefore
, are welcome????). With regard to customers’ health, genetically-manipulated crops as well as the pesticides and fertilizers used in them have not yet been proved safe for consumers.
As a result
 of
this
, there has been an increasing number of people suffering from these toxic chemicals. As far as the environment is concerned, the aforementioned chemical substances contaminate soil, water and other vegetation. It is clear that those improvements
on
Suggestion
in
food
 production come at the
expanse
amounts paid for goods and services that may be currently tax deductible (as opposed to capital expenditures)
expense
 of people’s health and the nature. In conclusion, while it is true that there is a much larger selection of
food
 available now, the quality has deteriorated by the use of crop protection chemicals and the genetic manipulation of plants.
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