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In many countries, people now wear Western clothes (suits, jeans) rather than traditional clothing. Why? Is this a positive or negative development?

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In recent decades, Western clothes
such
 as jeans, suits and shirts have become more and more popular in
fashion
 culture in many countries around the world.
Although
 some opinions state that
this
trend
 might challenge the preservation problem of traditional clothes,
this
 development needs to be carefully considered as a positive change due to various advantages.  There are a number of reasons leading to
this
fashion
trend
.
First
, the Western
fashion
 seems to have more conveniences in usage when compared to the traditional costumes.
For example
, to emphasize the formality of the traditional clothes, these clothes are usually designed with varieties of details which could possibly interrupt users when they are working, studying or practicing exercises.
Second
, thanks to the globalization, citizens of faraway countries are now able to purchase Western clothes with affordable prices. In fact, they can even get better deals with these clothes than the traditional costumes because of the competitions between apparel companies.  Even though the
trend
 has received some criticisms over the years, it has positively affected those countries in many different ways.
First
, in order to meet demands of Western clothing, garment industry has been invested with more capital and facilities.
This
 action supports not only the development of apparel industry but
also
 the whole economic system in those local countries.
Second
, along with the substantial economic impact, Western clothing
also
 brings more variety to existing markets, giving customers more options to weigh their decisions. It is clear that people should not be limited themselves by wearing traditional costumes for all occasions.  In conclusion, the Western
fashion
 should be embraced according to its advantages overwhelming disadvantages. From my point of view, one considerable movement is supporting the development of
this
 modern
fashion
trend
 along with the preservation of the traditional clothes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Influence
  • Perception
  • Modern
  • Trendy
  • Practicality
  • Comfort
  • Professionalism
  • Integration
  • Global economy
  • Cultural identity
  • Appreciation
  • Preservation
  • Individual expression
  • Freedom of choice
  • Positive
  • Negative
  • Impacts
  • Local industries
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