Many governments have laws that ban the sale and use of hard drugs such as heroin and cocaine, yet they allow people to buy drugs such as tobacco and alcohol. Laws that prohibit the sale and use of hard drugs should be applied to all drugs, including tobacco and alcohol.

Many individuals we know personally have their vices. The most common of them all are smoking
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& drinking
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. Abuse of hard
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as heroin and cocaine is considered taboo in society and amongst family & friends. I believe the restriction on hard
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should not be lifted, but the laws on cigarettes and liquor consumption should
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be tightened. Consumption of
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is indeed the leading cause of various health issues and public concerns. It can cause cancer, heart disease, and addiction to smoking. Secondhand smoke
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affects other people with issues of a similar degree.
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, excessive consumption of
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is
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the leading cause of liver disease, diabetes, and an increased risk of cancer.
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, it can
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lead to rowdy and unpleasant
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in individuals, leading to physical altercations, domestic abuse, and accidents caused by driving under the influence.
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, these types of substances should be
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in the same way as the government does for hard
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.
Tobacco
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and
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are substantially less damaging and addictive than cocaine or heroin.
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, the general public can safely consume
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without letting it get out of hand. Plus, it
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allows people to get comfortable in a social setting. Smoking is just as bad, but the banning of the substance can lead people to seek out hard
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, which are tenfold harmful than
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. In conclusion, there should not be a ban on the sale of
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and liquor legally, as they do pose problems for society.
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,
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, expose individuals to much higher risks, legally and health-wise. The government should invest in educational campaigns, advertisements, and policies that help citizens make an informed choice.

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task
State your view clearly in the intro and restate it in the end. Some ideas are not fully shown; add more detail and proof.
coherence
Use clear order of ideas. Use link words to show how ideas connect. Some sentences are long; break them into smaller parts.
content
The essay shows a clear stance and a plan to tax or tighten rules on tobacco and alcohol.
content
It discusses health harms and social issues from tobacco and alcohol.
structure
There is a simple, clear structure with intro, body and conclusion.

Your opinion

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Chronic diseases
  • Substance abuse
  • Psychological dependency
  • Social stigma
  • Preventive measures
  • Legislative framework
  • Healthcare expenditure
  • Judicial system
  • Prohibition era
  • Civil liberties
  • Tax revenues
  • Harm reduction
  • Ethical considerations
  • Public health policy
  • Addiction treatment
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