Friendships have become more important than family relationships.

In contrast
, some people think that
friendship
is more important as it is short lasting.We can make
friendship
with your classmates, colleagues at school and office.
However
, when we graduate or change our job, the friendships can be ended.
Secondly
, the distance of generations in
family
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the family
a family
can create different thinking.
Therefore
, it is believed that friends can understand us better than family members.
Becauses
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Because
of the same ages, we can have them same feeling with our friends.
Moreover
, to some people, making friends is a new world, they can have many good
experience
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experienced
time, learn and explore many challenges.
Finally
, we often have a thought that our family members are always at home to wait for us while it is arduous to have good friends.
This
makes us think that
friendship
is more important than
family relationship
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family relationships
the family relationship
. In my view,
family relationship
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the family relationship
is more important than
friendship
because it is difficult to find really good friends.
Family
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The family
is
only place
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the only place
where spends unconditioned love
to
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with
us and accepts
thing no
Accept comma addition
thing, no
matter what we do in the past or in the present.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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