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discuss: Is money the most important thing in life?

#money #life
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There is no doubt that
money
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 is not everything, but without
money
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 people have nothing.
Money
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 dominates mankind
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 as health,
time
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, and love. There is currently a lot of debate about
currency
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 is more important than anything in the world or not? What is more, there are no straightforward answers.
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, with great
money
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, people who are struggling with the disease will live longer. They have the opportunity to treat by good doctors and modern equipment.
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,
currency
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 cannot buy
time
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, but it helps us create more
time
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 for ourselves.
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 of spending a lot of
time
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 for cooking or cleaning the house, people who have cash, often hire maids to have more
time
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 to earn extra
money
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 or take care of themselves.
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, is
money
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 a condition to ensure love always happy? Having
money
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 can help us look after and stabilize your family life. Take my sister as an example, she fell head over heels with a man
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 they married, after one year they were unemployed and had no
money
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 to cover their lives, they always argued even that man beat my sister and eventually they broke up.
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, if we do not know how to use or earn
currency
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 correctly, it will be bad for us. Because of
money
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, a lot of people have lost their personalities. They steal, leave even murder victims to get the
money
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 they want. To sum up, we cannot live without
money
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, the nature of it is good or bad depending on the user. Do not make yourself a slave to
currency
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 and know how to master it.
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