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Individuals should not be allowed to carry guns as it increases crime and violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that, Individuals should not allowed to use and carry the guns as it creates negative influence of the society.
This
 statement is no exception has its own advantages and disadvantages.
Therefore
, following essay will elaborate my viewpoints in detail and reach to a conclusion. In order to justify my viewpoint, it can be said that carrying guns have a bad influence to the public.
This
 happens when individuals keep themselves with guns and
this
 can be threatening to the civil people in an extreme level.
For example
, the recent study done by the California university research team revealed that, the number of crimes related to gun shots increased by 40% in 2015. That article
further
 explained that, gunshots in the USA have increased by 5% in 2017. Individuals who are keeping
such
 weapons and guns will create an insecure environment. Today, we can see that, some countries have given permission to keep the guns and weapons to the individuals and frequently, people tend to use those weapons carelessly.
Such
 countries like Mexico, Latin America, Afganistan, Iraq and United States Of Ameria are allowing the individuals to use weapons and
such
 countries have already rated number of crimes like murders, gunshots, kidnapping and anti-social activities.
On the other hand
, some people argue that, allowing guns will be beneficial for the self protection. I believe that there are some circumstances, whereas for the purpose of self security for carrying weapons can be protective though users need to be cautious about the public eye as well. From the analysis of the above arguments, it can be concluded that the government must be prudent to strike a logical, balanced and rational approach towards allowing the guns to the individuals.
This
 is only possible if the government has right perception and perceptive about the issues of crimes have been occurring through using the weapons.
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