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You will be celebrating your son’s 8th birthday next week. You want to invite one of your colleagues to attend the birthday party. Write an invitation letter to this college. In your letter, invite your colleague to your son’s birthday party give details of the party and its date and time say how happy you and your family would be to have him/her at the party

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Dear Mrs Humera, I hope you are doing well. I am very excited to invite you
on
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 my
son
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's 8th birthday party which will be held in
upcoming
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 week on 15th May, Wednesday.
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 birthday event will be really surprising for my
son
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 as
this
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 time , I am planning to organise
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an
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event in the Reymond
plaza
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then
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 at home. My
son
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 always
love
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 to celebrate his special day with his
freinds
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friends
 and
prefer
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prefers
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 to have a
cake cutting
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 ceremony at the house.
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 time my parents are here as they came from India recently to visit so me and my husband plan to have a
get
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together with
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 our loved ones to make
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 day memorable and
enjoyfull
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enjoy full
enjoyable
. As you are my close
collegue
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colleague
 working with
my
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me
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 and have a good relationship like a family
so
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I was wondering if you
can
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 join us on
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 occasion ,
oif
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if
 you feel comfortable as you are staying alone here
so
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you will feel
good
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 family atmosphere.
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 party will start
by
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 5:00pm and will be done by 8:00 pm which will not be too late for you . I have talk about you with my family alot so they are very excited to meet you and really feel happy if you will be present here. I will really appreciate for your time and would requrest you not to spend money to buy any gift for my
son
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. Your's Sincerely Gurpreet

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clarity
Ensure clarity in your sentence structure to increase overall comprehensibility, especially when detailing the event.
grammar and punctuation
Consider revising for grammatical accuracy and punctuation (e.g., comma usage, spacing issues) to enhance the readability of your invitation.
organization
It might be beneficial to organize your ideas more clearly by separating them into distinct paragraphs, making the invitation easier to follow.
purpose and tone
Excellent job in clearly stating the purpose of the letter and extending a warm invitation.
task completion
You successfully conveyed the details of the party (date, time, and location), which is crucial for the task.
tone and personal touch
The personal tone and expression of how much it would mean for your family to have the recipient at the party added a warm touch to your invitation.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • heartfelt invitation
  • celebrate
  • occasion
  • significance
  • venue
  • entertainment
  • appreciate
  • memorable
  • RSVP
  • reiterate
  • looking forward
  • warm closing
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