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Some governments spend a lot of public money training individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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India is a country where the most famous sport is "Cricket". Though hockey is our national game but, we only praise cricket. Now a
days
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day
,
government
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the government
 is trying to enhance the capabilities of individuals in sports by providing them trainings using public money, which is
further
 a great decision and we all need to support it. India is a developing country which is far away from most of the countries in sports competitions. Earlier, the sports conditions in
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
 were very worse. The player's were not even getting the proper diets while practicing in
government
 facilities.
However
, it is improving gradually. We are now even improving in all the sports
such
 as wrestling,
kabbadi
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Kabbadi
,
Accept space
,
women
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women's
 cricket
,
Accept space
,
racing
,
Accept space
,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
. The
government
 is now providing the facilities
to
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for
 people to enhance their capabilities. They are even getting the yearly package to work on their weaknesses.
This
 is really boosting the inner of sports persons and they are improving well and getting the awards internationally.
This
 is not only for the benefit of individuals. They are
also
 improving the picture of India among all the countries. I
am strongly agree
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strongly agree
 that the
government
 should support them by training them to keep up the
india
in truth (often tends to intensify)
indeed
 all over the world.
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