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On vehicle-free day, private cars, trucks and motorcycles are banned in the city centre while the public transport is permitted such as bicycle, buses and taxis. Do the benefits of vehicle- day outweigh the disadvantages

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It is argued by some that, on vehicle-free
day
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 private vehicles should be banned in town and preference should be given to public transport
such
 as buses and
bicycle
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bicycles
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. In my perception, the disadvantages
such
 as slow down in country recession are eclipsed by its advantages like
less climates
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fewer climate
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 hassles and saving in fuel. The prevalent drawback of the prohibition on private transportation may lead to
declining
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 the recession of the city. If the goods or the raw material is not reached well within the specified time period,
then
 the business has to
undergo
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 from the loss which in turn affects the economy of the country.
For example
, in chemical process industries once
boiler
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the boiler
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started
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, needs to feed continuously to complete
one
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 cycle process. Restarting the boiler, for any sort of reason, is an exorbitant process.
This
 example speaks volumes about the effect on the nation's economy
due to
boycott
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on
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 private transportation. Despite the
drawback
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drawbacks
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 of recession
slow down
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, the prevalent advantage of restrictions on private transportation is the low environmental hassle and the low fuel consumption. As there will be less number of private cars on the road, obviously
vehicle
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vehicles
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 will not spew harmful gases
in
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an
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 air.
This
 will be beneficial to reduce the habitat problems to some extent.
Moreover
,
the
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petrol and diesel consumption will be less
and
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which in turn saves
the
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precious
fossil-fuel
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fossil fuel
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 on
vehicle free
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vehicle-free
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day
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.
Therefore
,
for
this
 reason, I believe that the ban on private transport
not
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 only beneficial to the surroundings
,
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 but
also
 saves
the
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natural resources on vehicle-free
day
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.
To conclude
, the advantages
such
 as less climate hassle and saving in fuel are overshadowed by the disadvantages like
to lighten in
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 economic growth.
Therefore
, having weighed up the pros and cons, I am convinced that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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