On vehicle-free day, private cars, trucks and motorcycles are banned in the city centre while the public transport is permitted such as bicycle, buses and taxis. Do the benefits of vehicle- day outweigh the disadvantages
It is argued by some that, on vehicle-free
day
private vehicles should be banned in town and preference should be given to public transport Fix the agreement mistake
days
such
as buses and bicycle
. In my perception, the disadvantages Fix the agreement mistake
bicycles
such
as slow down in country recession are eclipsed by its advantages like less climates
hassles and saving in fuel.
The prevalent drawback of the prohibition on private transportation may lead to Fix the agreement mistake
fewer climate
declining
the recession of the city. If the goods or the raw material is not reached well within the specified time period, Wrong verb form
a decline in
then
the business has to undergo
from the loss which in turn affects the economy of the country. Verb problem
suffer
For example
, in chemical process industries once boiler
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the boiler
started
, needs to feed continuously to complete Wrong verb form
starts
one
cycle process. Restarting the boiler, for any sort of reason, is an exorbitant process. Correct determiner usage
a
This
example speaks volumes about the effect on the nation's economy due to
boycott
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the boycott
on
private transportation.
Despite the Change preposition
of
drawback
of recession Fix the agreement mistake
drawbacks
slow down
, the prevalent advantage of restrictions on private transportation is the low environmental hassle and the low fuel consumption. As there will be less number of private cars on the road, obviously Correct your spelling
slowdown
vehicle
will not spew harmful gases Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
in
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into
an
air. Correct article usage
the
This
will be beneficial to reduce the habitat problems to some extent. Moreover
, the
petrol and diesel consumption will be less Correct article usage
apply
and
which in turn saves Correct word choice
apply
the
precious Correct article usage
apply
fossil-fuel
on Correct your spelling
fossil fuel
vehicle free
Add a hyphen
vehicle-free
day
. Fix the agreement mistake
days
Therefore
, for
this
reason, I believe that the ban on private transport not
only beneficial to the surroundingsAdd a missing verb
is not
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
saves the
natural resources on vehicle-free Correct article usage
apply
day
.
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days
To conclude
, the advantages such
as less climate hassle and saving in fuel are overshadowed by the disadvantages like to lighten in
economic growth. Change the verb form
lightening
Therefore
, having weighed up the pros and cons, I am convinced that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.Submitted by yogeshkc87 on
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