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Companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities. To what extent do you agree? (Reported 2017)

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It is considered that the private organizations should provide social and sports services to the local communities. In my opinion, while the local firms should contribute
in it up to
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it up to
to it up to
 a certain level, the actual responsibility should be on the
government
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. On the one hand, the local companies should participate in providing sports and social services to the local community up to some extent.
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 is because the
government
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 is already facing enormous burden in managing and providing funds and arrangements for different sectors including social services and sports domain.
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Therefore companies
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Therefore, companies
 should assist in social services
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 as medical facilities, housing, and sports to the local communities.
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,
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, the ultimate responsibility of providing social and sports facilities lies on the governing body.
State
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The state
A state
 has the sufficient budget availability to spend in the different sectors pertaining to the local people. Which in turn
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is
 most likely to be run successfully, due to the involvement of the
government
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. Another reason of state role is that, it collects taxes from the citizens for providing services.
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 means, the
government
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 is responsible for providing health, education, and sports facilities. Large companies try to support their employees from different industries, because it is in their interests that the
government
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 abdicates its responsibility by using
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 situation to their advantage In conclusion, it is believed that the local organizations ought to provide social and sports services. In my view, private companies should participate in
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 services up to some extent;
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, eventually it is the
government
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 to deliver in making the availability of sports and social cares.
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