Many scientists believe that seeking out life by sending messages into space is a good idea while others feel that it is dangerous. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Scientists
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have different views about attempts to communicate with space, some of them think it's preferable,
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others are pessimistic about it. In
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essay, I will discuss both perspectives and share my opinion. On the one hand,
scientists
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who support sending messages to space believe that it enhances our scientific knowledge.
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exploring other
civilisations
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, we have the opportunity to learn more about biology, evolution, and what's necessary for life.
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, it could provide us with insights into how life on
earth
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evolved and whether similar processes occur
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in the universe.
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, in the Atacama Desert in Chile, one of the driest places on Earth,
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have found bacteria that can survive with very little water.
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helps us understand how life might survive on arid planets like Mars.
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method is beneficial because it helps us understand our planet through exploring space.
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, other
scientists
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don't recommend
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because the intentions of other
civilisations
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are unknown. We have no way of knowing the intentions or nature of extraterrestrial
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that may receive our
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messages
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. They could be friendly, natural, or hostile.
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, contacting a civilisation with hostile intentions could pose a significant risk to humanity. To illustrate, physicist Stephen Hawking cautioned against actively reaching out to extraterrestrial civilizations. He compared potential contact with aliens to the arrival of Europeans in the Americas, which had devastating consequences for the indigenous populations. In conclusion,
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the unknown nature of different
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is risky, I believe that reaching out
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extraterrestrial
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is necessary and beneficial for our knowledge and advancement.
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Consider expanding the essay with additional examples or points to further substantiate your arguments. This can add depth and make your points more compelling.
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You have given a complete response to the topic, addressing both sides of the argument and providing a clear opinion on the matter.
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The use of relevant and specific examples, like the Atacama Desert bacteria and Stephen Hawking's caution, strengthens your arguments and demonstrates a good understanding of the topic.

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