Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook, Zalo,...) have a negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, social networking sites (

such

as Facebook, Zalo,...)

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thought to make a negative impact on both individuals and society. I disagree with

this

statement because of these following reasons. The appearance of social networking sites marks an obvious advance on

developing

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the development

development

developers

developments

of the technology changing the

way

the world works.

Firstly

, it changes the

way

human communicating with others. In the past, people had to write letters needing a long time to arrive and

this

mode of communicating wasted time and money. Social networking sites

makes

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make

have made

people communicate easily with only one touch by using

smartphone

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smartphones

a smartphone

. Facebook, Zalo

allow

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allows

us contact with

anyone regardless

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anyone, regardless

of long distance.

Besides

that, these sites help

human

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humanely

keep up to date with the newest technology, hottest news or

recent trend

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recent trends

the recent trend

. With only smartphone connected to the Internet, anyone can know

state

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the state

of COVID-19 in America or Europe,

know

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knows

when

Iphone

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iPhone

IPhone

12 presented, etc. The development of social networking

sites

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site

changes not only the

way

people

communicate but

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communicate, but

also

the

way

people work. In recent years, more and more jobs have been created in

new technology period

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the new technology period

a new technology period

, especially with the

drustic

forceful and extreme and rigorous

drastic

development of

social network

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social networks

a social network

such

as Youtubers, freelancer, etc. When becoming a

youtuber

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YouTube

or freelancer, people can work from home or wherever, whenever they want

instead

of going to workplace

for

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work. In general, social networking sites give human many benefits, help human life become easier.

On the other hand

, people can’t deny that social networking sites affect human life negatively. The development of

social network

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a social network

is accompanied by the negative compacts. Some people take

advantages

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advantage

of Facebook, Zalo, other sites to deceive others. Many crimes were done by help of social network. In conclusion,

although

there are some negative impact social networking sites bring about, they give human and society many benefits. Whether good or not, it depends on the

way

people using social networking sites.

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