Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook, Zalo,...) have a negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, social networking sites (
such
as Facebook, Zalo,...)
is
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Is
thought to make a negative impact on both individuals and society. I disagree with
this
statement because of these following reasons. The appearance of social networking sites marks an obvious advance on
developing
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the development
development
developers
developments
of the technology changing the
way
the world works.
Firstly
, it changes the
way
human communicating with others. In the past, people had to write letters needing a long time to arrive and
this
mode of communicating wasted time and money. Social networking sites
makes
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make
have made
people communicate easily with only one touch by using
smartphone
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smartphones
a smartphone
. Facebook, Zalo
allow
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allows
us contact with
anyone regardless
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anyone, regardless
of long distance.
Besides
that, these sites help
human
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humanely
keep up to date with the newest technology, hottest news or
recent trend
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recent trends
the recent trend
. With only smartphone connected to the Internet, anyone can know
state
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the state
of COVID-19 in America or Europe,
know
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knows
when
Iphone
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iPhone
IPhone
12 presented, etc. The development of social networking
sites
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site
changes not only the
way
people
communicate but
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communicate, but
also
the
way
people work. In recent years, more and more jobs have been created in
new technology period
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the new technology period
a new technology period
, especially with the
drustic
forceful and extreme and rigorous
drastic
development of
social network
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social networks
a social network
such
as Youtubers, freelancer, etc. When becoming a
youtuber
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YouTube
or freelancer, people can work from home or wherever, whenever they want
instead
of going to workplace
for
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to
work. In general, social networking sites give human many benefits, help human life become easier.
On the other hand
, people can’t deny that social networking sites affect human life negatively. The development of
social network
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a social network
is accompanied by the negative compacts. Some people take
advantages
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advantage
of Facebook, Zalo, other sites to deceive others. Many crimes were done by help of social network. In conclusion,
although
there are some negative impact social networking sites bring about, they give human and society many benefits. Whether good or not, it depends on the
way
people using social networking sites.
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