Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook, Zalo,...) have a negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, social networking sites (

such

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as Facebook, Zalo,...)

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thought to make a negative impact on both individuals and society. I disagree with

this

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statement because of these following reasons. The appearance of social networking sites marks an obvious advance on

developing

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the development

development

developers

developments

of the technology changing the

way

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the world works.

Firstly

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, it changes the

way

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human communicating with others. In the past, people had to write letters needing a long time to arrive and

this

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mode of communicating wasted time and money. Social networking sites

makes

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make

have made

people communicate easily with only one touch by using

smartphone

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smartphones

a smartphone

. Facebook, Zalo

allow

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allows

us contact with

anyone regardless

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anyone, regardless

of long distance.

Besides

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that, these sites help

human

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humanely

keep up to date with the newest technology, hottest news or

recent trend

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recent trends

the recent trend

. With only smartphone connected to the Internet, anyone can know

state

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the state

of COVID-19 in America or Europe,

know

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knows

when

Iphone

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iPhone

IPhone

12 presented, etc. The development of social networking

sites

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site

changes not only the

way

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people

communicate but

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communicate, but

also

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the

way

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people work. In recent years, more and more jobs have been created in

new technology period

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the new technology period

a new technology period

, especially with the

drustic

forceful and extreme and rigorous

drastic

development of

social network

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social networks

a social network

such

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as Youtubers, freelancer, etc. When becoming a

youtuber

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YouTube

or freelancer, people can work from home or wherever, whenever they want

instead

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of going to workplace

for

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work. In general, social networking sites give human many benefits, help human life become easier.

On the other hand

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, people can’t deny that social networking sites affect human life negatively. The development of

social network

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a social network

is accompanied by the negative compacts. Some people take

advantages

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advantage

of Facebook, Zalo, other sites to deceive others. Many crimes were done by help of social network. In conclusion,

although

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there are some negative impact social networking sites bring about, they give human and society many benefits. Whether good or not, it depends on the

way

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people using social networking sites.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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314 words

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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook, Zalo,...) have a negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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