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Nowadays, people can easily find and share information online. What problems can this cause and what are solutions ?

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Nowadays, people can easily find and
share
information
 online.
This
 can result in many issues, which calls for possible solutions to be adopted. Easy finding and sharing
information
 online can lead to several consequences. One problem could be that scammers can steal user’s personal
information
such
 as emails, phone numbers, credit card numbers or bank account
information
. As an example, they will use user’s personal
information
 to scam user’s friends and relatives.
Moreover
, credit card numbers and bank account
information
 are vulnerable to be hacked by hackers.
As a result
, users can lose personal credibility and money. Another issue could be that academic
information
 can be inaccurate.
This
 can make you misunderstand an issue and affect study or work performance. Especially, if you find and
share
 unverified political
information
, you will be arrested and affect your future.
In addition
, you
also
 will make other people have negative attitudes toward the Governing party.
This
 can cause demonstrations and rids,
therefore
, the country’s economy could be damaged seriously. There are a number of measures which can be put forward to ease
issues
Suggestion
the issues
.
Firstly
, user should not oversee personal
information
 online and only
share
 with trusted people. Users can
also
 enhance online security measures by selling a unique password or apply two factor authentication to better protect users’ accounts from being hacked into by hackers. Another solution could be that you should only search for
information
 from credible sources
such
 Government websites or university websites and avoid open sources
such wikipedia
Suggestion
such as Wikipedia
such Wikipedia
.
This
 helps you reduce the risk of encountering inaccurate or misleading
information
.
In addition
, users should not find or even
share
 unverified political
information
. They should advise other people not to propagandize against the government on the internet. In conclusion,
although
 easy finding and sharing
information
 online can cause a number of problems, there are several actions that can be taken to address these issues.
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