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The first car appeared on british roads in 1888. By the year 2000, there maybe as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that introduction of stricter rules for owning a
car
 and its usage is important due to the increase in usage of private cars and it is
also
 necessary to encourage citizens to
use
 other transport forms.
Although
 high
use
 of self-owned vehicles has its disadvantages like pollution and traffic congestion, I do not agree that international laws should be made in order to own and
use
 a
car
 as it would lead to job redundancies. It is irrefutable that using a personal
car
 has multiple negative consequences.
Firstly
, the Carbon dioxide released from the vehicles is very harmful for the environment. Global warming,
for instance
, is a result of increasing pollution, which has led to the rise of water levels in the polar regions.
Secondly
, high traffic is a common sight in most of the metro cities at present. Due to
this
 a lot of valuable time is lost in travelling which could have been used to practice any skills for self-improvement.
However
, the automobile industry
also
 plays a critical role in the economy of any country.
In other words
, it generates a lot of employment opportunities for both low skilled and high skilled workers.
For example
, according to employment journal published in 2019, 5% of the employed workers in India were from
car
 manufacturing and allied industries.
Thus
, bringing in international laws to reduce the number of buyers for a privately-owned
car
 would mean a reduction of
car
 units which might cause loss of innumerable jobs. In conclusion,
although
 I believe that every government should encourage their citizens to
use
 their public transport system, they must
also
 avoid creating laws that stop them from buying a personal vehicle as
this
 might indirectly cause a loss of livelihood for many of its native.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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