The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart

shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people

think the costs of adult education should be shared.
The graphs illustrate why
adults
choose to study and how should associated expenses of their education be divided among them, their work and
the
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society.
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, there are two main motivations
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for more than two-thirds of the total reasons for the study decision. And most people believe that
adults
should cover the highest proportion of their costs.
adults
’ interest in certain subjects and
to acquire
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qualifications are major elements in their study decision. It
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accounted for 40 % and 38 % respectively. Those who pursue their education to help them with their current job
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22% of
total
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adults
surveyed. The advancement in their career and
to enjoy
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the process of learning was equally significant at 20%. Meeting people is not one of their main considerations. Only 9% of respondents mentioned it as a motivation for their decision. Followed by the reason to change their occupations, where slightly more
adults
consider it an important factor ( 12%). Regarding finance, people think that 40% of the total costs should be covered by the learners themselves.
While
the other 60% should be covered by their employers at 35% and the taxpayers at 25%.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words adults with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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