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A woman’s place is in the home. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#woman’s #place #home
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From the past
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there were so many arguments about Women’s right.There were different ideologies
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 as women do not education
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women’s value is lower than men and so on
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 One of them is the concept “
woman
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’s place is in the
home
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 “.Most of people think that a
woman
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 has to bring-up children
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Woman
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 responsible for everything in the
home
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However
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However, the woman who
However the woman who
However a woman who
woman
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 who is equal man and who works have significant positive effects.
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Woman
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A woman
The woman
 may be key of evolution
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guarantee of healthy population and lifeguard of peace.
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 of all
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educated women can be key of improvement because that
woman
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 knows how to bring-up children
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The
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 who got right upbringing has opportunity make do new things and discover
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Especially women who know more thing and who work among the colleagues have more creative logic
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 So women can effect to
development
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develop
 by bringing up their children.
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, women have collectively made progress concerning social participation, politics, employment, and leadership
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For instance
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, we have women presidents and leaders of considerable organizations.
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, Female has
considirable role
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a considerable role
considerable role
considerably role
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in
 health.One
person
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 makes country famous, reverse one stupid
person
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 disgrace country. I think healthy population is the main thing
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in
 every country.In
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 women
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. Stress is a major cause of many diseases
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A
person
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 who sits always at
home
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 may feel herself stressful, every day to see or to do the same thing effects negatively.
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, if she is pregnant, her baby may have psychological problems like autism.If she has children at
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home she
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home, she
 may swear them and it
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 brings troubles. Meanwhile, women have greater role in communication.Matron can be intermediary in
every where
to or in any or all places
everywhere
.A small example is in the family, she mediates her children.A big reason is relationship easy and effective
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Because women can speak beautifully. I want to say one Chinese proverb « Women hold up half the sky».It can proof all information which I mention. To conclude, I want to say I want to say female has a majority in everywhere.
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woman
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 a main key to future
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and
development
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develop
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 So women’s and men’s should be equal, and
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 the world would become exciting.
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Finally I
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Finally, I
 say I absolutely disagree with
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 statement.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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