In many countries ,small shops are closing.Give your reasons about this also is it a positive or a negative development?

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Grocery shops
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fruits and
vegitable
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vegetable
vegetables
shops
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textiles
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electric shops sell daily
use
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used
items to people.
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now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
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these smaller shops are facing shut down across the world.
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essay will discuss about the multiple factors for
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situation. I believe
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change would be a negative development. The primary reason is globalization
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which promote foreign investment
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many international brands opened their shop outlets
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For example
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Middle East based
lulu
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Lulu
group built large shopping complexes in the heart of many cities in
kerala
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Kerala
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these malls have brought new shopping experience to consumers
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small markets faced heavy decline in the number of customers. Advertisement
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is also playing
has also played
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play a crucial role
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which lure people with mega discounts
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introduces an alternative
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so
do
to save money people tend to purchase products from
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brands
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Consider the flat discount offers of Levis
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Reebook, Woodland
shops even
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shops, even
the middle class people
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can purchase
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products when they see flat rebate ads
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Moreover
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in order to save shopping time people avoid small shops and buy products from a
super market
a large self-service grocery store selling groceries and dairy products and household goods
supermarket
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where they can get everything from the same shop.
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will definitely have negative ramifications not only
socially but
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socially, but
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economically.
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, when small shop owners face loss of profit and that will badly lead to mental trauma as their EMI" S can not pay back to
bank
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the bank
and eventually they may
develope
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
suicidal tendency and alcohol addiction.
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similarly
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Similarly
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unemployement rate
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the unemployment rate
unemployment rate
may increase because many supermarkets recruit
foreign salepersons
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a foreign salesperson
foreign salesperson
as part of their trade policy.
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many big shops are giving tax to
central government
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the central government
in the form of GST
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state governments can not get any financial benefits. To conclude
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globalization
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commerials
connected with or engaged in or sponsored by or used in commerce or commercial enterprises
commercials
cameras
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and preference of comfort shopping may lead to the
clossing
final or ending
closing
of small shops and that will create many
dis advantages
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
to people
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society
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also
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to
authorities
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the authorities
in the form of economic imbalance and social problems.
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