A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter, • Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team. • Summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts. • Say how you think the company should spend the money.
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Hello
dear
, I am writing Change the capitalization
Dear
this
letter to show you how it is important to invest money in sports
, I strongly believe that sports
can make people
live better.
I have a kid and pay for him to play soccer on the weekend because these days everybody stays all the time on the cell phone, internet, etc. It is not healthy do
not Correct your spelling
to
play
any Fix the infinitive
to play
sports
, so I advise everybody needs to play unless one sport keeps your body healthy and in good shape.
I hardly believe companies
want to make the people
live better and investment in sport provides health and exposition for the company. When I was a child, I used to play soccer on the street and I was so happy, but now it is very tough to that
with a lot of violence.
To conclude, I am very positive the way Add a missing verb
do that
companies
have been changed how they spend the money, by the way
I know many Add the comma(s)
,way
companies
that invest a bunch with sports
, donations and make the people
live better. I really believe that companies
need to care and help the community to have a better place to live. I am pretty happy that you think about help sports
and make the
Correct article usage
apply
people
live better.
Best Regards JhonesSubmitted by jhones.goncalves on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
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