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TEAM ACTIVITIES CAN TEACH MORE SKILLS FOR LIFE THAN THOSE ACTIVITIES WHICH ARE PLAYED ALONE. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THIS STATEMENT.

#team #activities #skills #life
In recent times, having many options for the format of
work
Suggestion
the work
 could teach skills for humanity. In my opinion, the best format is the
team
 activities.
Team
 activities could teach more skills for
life
 than others. There are a variety of skills of
life
 are the community could teach for people.
Firstly
, It is could be co-operation and conflict management skills. In fact, each person has their own particular personality which leads to the difference of point of view in any statement and it is easily led to arguing together, so that
team
 working gives chance to humans to experiment with each other in the group of
team
 and can be well-operation which is solo activity could not teach.
Secondly
,
Team
-work could help people have more responsibility. The stagnation of participants in the group can have a big impact on the way to get the target of the
team
, so
this
 aspect made the participants have to take responsibility for their mission. Another compelling reason that
team
-work could help
humankind
Suggestion
humankind's
 comprehensive development.
Likewise
, people can learn leadership, decision-making, and create critical thinking while doing
team
 activities, those that skills are tremendously useful in real
life
,
for example
, humans can get a huge benefit through the right decision in businesses.
Furthermore
, it is could assistance people in
intrapersonal
occurring among or involving several people
interpersonal
intelligence
Accept comma addition
intelligence, such
such
 as listen to other's views and learn how to accept the correct suggestion of others, people can gather the right suggestions and show their excellent decision. In conclusion, teamwork or individual
work both have
Suggestion
work, both have
 their own advantages. Basically, in my perspective, group jobs would be more to improve the necessary skills in
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • leadership
  • interpersonal skills
  • teamwork
  • belonging
  • learning from others
  • responsibility
  • accountability
  • self-discipline
  • self-motivation
  • personal reflection
  • introspection
  • independence
  • self-reliance
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