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Everyone should stay at school until 18. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a body of opinion which advocates that all youngsters should stay on at
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 until they are 18. I agree with
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 view, despite the arguments for leaving
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 at an earlier age. There are two important arguments in favour of quitting
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 before the age of 18.
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, in some countries continuing
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 until 18 is simply a preparation for entering higher education. There may be a lack of vocational courses to prepare young people to acquire experience and skills to enter trades
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 as electricians, car mechanics or professions
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 as nursing. Those who are not intending to pursue an academic career may fall behind with their studies or even disrupt lessons.
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, family background must be considered. In poor families, young people must leave
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 and start to earn money to contribute to the family income. Not all families can afford to let the children stay on at
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 until 18.
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, in spite of these objections, I concur with those who believe in compulsory education until 18. The provision of a wide range of courses would make learning meaningful, so that all young people could put the knowledge gained at
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 into practice. The global economy now demands high skill levels, and educational qualifications are essential if youngsters are to have good job prospects and to pursue a successful career. In financial terms, national and local authorities must provide funding for poor families to maintain children at
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. Children are the shapers of a nation’s tomorrow, so all must have the chance to make the grade by benefitting from the best possible education during their formative years. In conclusion, I would argue that staying at
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 up to the age of 18 would be of enormous benefit to all youngsters.
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