The pie charts show the results of a survey conducted by a university on the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services.

The pie charts show the results of a survey conducted by a university on the opinions  of full-time and part-time students about its services.
The pie charts
compares
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the estimation of
students
about their
services
of IT support offered and
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hours
of full-
time
and
part
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time
ferformed
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performed
by a university. As can be seen from the charts that
almost
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people were satisfied
about
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services
but the proportion of
students
satisfaction
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with IT
supporting
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were
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higher than that with opening
hours
. Looking at the positive responses first, the proportion of the full-
time
students
ranked first with
services
of IT supporting very happy accounted for 54% but only 5% of the
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time
students
rated
services
of IT supporting as excellent and it held the
third
position.
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the
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time
and
part
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time
students
were satisfied with
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intrusion
instrument
of opening
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former registering 87% and the latter a massive 72%.The percentage of both types of
students
quite happy was equivalent with
services
of IT
supporting
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and that of
full
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time
students
was 11% higher than the figure of
part
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time
students
with
services
of opening
hours
. With regard to negative the percentage of
part
-
time
students
were
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dissatisfied with
services
of IT
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made up nearly half and it was first – placed,
while
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part
time
students
, who was unhappy only constituted 15%.Strikingly, the
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emission
of both kind
students
wad discontent with mean of opening
hours
accounted a very small
part
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, services, hours, part, time with synonyms.
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