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the chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average prices in 1989. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average prices in 1989. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The average house
prices
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 in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 dramatically changed compared with the average house
prices
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 in 1989. The cities are New York, USA; Frankfurt, Germany;
Madrid
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, Spain;
London
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, UK; and Tokyo, Japan.
Firstly
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, the chart shows that in 1990-1995
average
Correct article usage
the average
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 in New York, Tokyo, and
London
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 has -8% and -5% change from 1989
prices
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, but New York
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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5
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by 5
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% in
1996
Correct article usage
the 1996
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-2002 average
as well as
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London
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that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 increase
12
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by 12
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%.
On the other hand
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, Tokyo is the only city
that
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is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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still on negative percentage in 1996-2002.
Secondly
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,
Madrid
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 and Frankfurt show a positive percentage in 1990 and increases
a
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by a
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tiny proportion in 2002.
Madrid
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 with 1% in 1990 increases
into
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to
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 4% in 2002.
On the other hand
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, Frankfurt decrease
a
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by a
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tiny proportion in 2002. In conclusion,
London
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 has the most huge development, in average house
prices
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 between 1990 and 2002.
Second
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 is
Madrid
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 with -5% and 5% difference. The other cities adjust a tiny change for both different years from 1989
prices
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, madrid, london with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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