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The news media have too much influence on people’s lives today and this is a negative development. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

Just a few decades ago, the
news
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media
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was
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 operated only through radio and printed newspapers.
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, it has now entered the daily lives of citizens through many modern devices
such
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 as phones, laptops.
While
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 it has an enormous impact on most
people
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’s
life
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lives
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, I partly agree that
this
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 is a mostly negative development, and I will mention the reason why in
this
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 essay. On the one hand,
Disadvantages
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the Disadvantages
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 of
media
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 include the risk of inaccurate reporting and loss of privacy. Sometimes, in a rush to be the first to break a story, the
media
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give
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gives
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 inaccurate or inaccurate
information
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.
This
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 can be confusing, and depending on the
information
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, it can damage the reputation of one or more
people
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.
For instance
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,
few
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a few
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 weeks ago,
Viet
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Vietnam
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 Nam
as well as
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 the whole
world
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world,
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have
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 to fight against the
corona virus
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coronavirus
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, and lots of Vietnamese
people
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post
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posted
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 some wrong
information
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 on social
media
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such
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, such
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 as Facebook, Instagram,
…
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etc.
Due to
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 that wrong
news
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people
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, people
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 in my
countries
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country
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 become
confuse
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 and
worry
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 about their health because of the danger of the virus.
On the other hand
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, the
media
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 can play a
very
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vital and helpful role.
News
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 can leave audiences with different impressions about life around the world. Via a few
news
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 articles, audiences can learn about how beautiful
of
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other countries around the world
.
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are.
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 It is
also
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 common to find articles on how miserable
people
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 are at wars, how bad the living conditions are, or how unstable the political situation is in
some
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certain areas.
In addition
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, we make a lot of mutual acquaintances to broaden our knowledge about the culture,
life style
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lifestyle
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 or traditions of different nations. In conclusion,
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personally
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Personally
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 I think that
beside
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besides
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 some
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drawbacks
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drawback
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drawback,
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news
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media
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 bring
to
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us lots of
benefit
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benefits
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,
the
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 role of
news
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media
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 as an
information
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 provider should be acknowledged. In case of emergency, it acts as a lifesaver. So it is dependent on how
people
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 use it to provide or approach
information
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.

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task response
Be clear about your view. Pick if you agree or disagree and keep to it.
organization
Plan before you write. Use a clear plan with one idea per paragraph.
grammar
Check your grammar. Fix mistakes such as wrong tense and plural.
coherence
Link ideas with easy words like first, also, but, for example.
content
Add more specific examples and details to support ideas.
vocabulary
Use vocabulary you know well. Avoid hard words.
content
Gives views on both sides.
structure
Has an introduction and a conclusion.
content
Has some good examples.
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