Increasing travels between countries enable people to learn different cultures or to increase tension between people from different countries?

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It is true that many people are travelling overseas to study the culture’s other countries. Meanwhile, some people believe that going to other countries can lead to conflict between people. Personally, I argue that travelling can bring many benefits for travellers. On the one hand, people who believe that travelling to other countries can create conflict between people base their opinion on several reasons.
Firstly
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, the reason is that misunderstanding caused by
languague
a systematic means of communicating by the use of sounds or conventional symbols
language
barries
a structure or object that impedes free movement
barriers
.
For example
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, people want to buy some things or visit
famous place
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a famous place
famous places
, they can leave on difficult feeling when are unable to communicate with native speakers.
Mowever
in addition
Moreover
, travelling with translator can help overcome
cultural barrier
Suggestion
cultural barriers
the cultural barrier
. If they have problems in communication, it would be
embrassing
hard to deal with; especially causing pain or embarrassment
embarrassing
to each other rather than conflict between people.
On the other hand
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, I believe that rising visiting between nations can bring
peple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
to know more and more about
cultures
Suggestion
the cultures
of other countries. By visiting other countries, people can learn about tradition which enable them to limit on making
cultureal
of or relating to the arts and manners that a group favors
cultural
mistakes.
For example
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, taking off shoes before going to Japanese house help to avoid being viewed as disrespectful.
Secondly
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, travelling offer visitors an
oppoturnity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
to enjoy tasting kind of food. When people visit to Viet Nam, they can try to taste local
special
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speciality
foods
such
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as Pho, Bun.
Therefore
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, it can bring unforgettable emotions when they taste famous foods. In conclusion,
although
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both views certainly have some validity, it seems to me that it is better
to
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for
increasing to travel other nations.
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