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Traditional medicine, such as acupuncture and herbal remedies, is very popular in some countries. Those who practice traditional medicine claim it is better than modern medicine in maintaining and improving health. Do you agree or disagree with this viewpoint?

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Health is one of the important part of today's fast
life
.
Also
, There are many changes come in the field of Medical because of latest technology. There are many
differant
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 medicines are available for health related problems. Some people deem that traditional medicines are better than other chemical contain medicines.
However
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 disagree with the given statement and gives
my
objective form of "I"
me
detail explanation
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a detail explanation
the detail explanation
 in
given
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giving
eassay
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
assay
.
Firstly
, With
help
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the help
 of modern
technology there
Accept comma addition
technology, there
 are many
multispecialist
 equipments comes in the
filed
catch or pick up (balls) in baseball or cricket
field
 of medical with the help of that
peoples
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people
 get better treatment in less time in
compare
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comparison
 to traditional
medicine
. There is no doubt that traditional medicines are not giving
right solution
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the right solution
 of health related issues. But, it takes long time to come over from it. Which is not acceptable in fast moving
life
.
In addition
, traditional medicines are not useful in problems like Cancer, Heart relate problems because
this
plural of "this"
these
 are the problems in which doctors are testing
differant
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 types of
medicine
 to
paticent
a person who requires medical care
patients
 to
shows
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show
there
of them or themselves
their
 reaction.
Therefore
, the
medicine
 which gives quick
responce
a result
response
 are suitable. Undoubtedly, Traditional medicines are not as quick.
For instance
, the survey taken by WHO in 2019 shows that peoples selecting modern
medicine
 than traditional which provide fast relief to their problem.
on
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On
 the other hand, some public in
genral
applying to all or most members of a category or group
general
 trend
propund
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propounds
propound
profound
 that traditional medicines
has
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have
 no side effect on body in
compare
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comparing
comparison
 to other types of
medicine
.
For example
, Paracetemol,
tynol
move through by or as by digging
tunnel
 and other medicines may damage human kidney if they consume without proper
guidanc
something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action
guidance
. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
reitterate
to say, state, or perform again
reiterate
reiterated
 that traditional
medicine
 has their own values and important. But, they are more time consuming process which is not
prefered
more desirable than another
preferred
prepared
 in
this
 modern fast
life
.So,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 do have respect to traditional
medicines but we
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medicines, but we
can not
can not
cannot
 say that modern medicines do not have
ability
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the ability
to
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of
 giving healthy
life
to
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of
 peoples.
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