some people think that competition at work, at school and daily life is good thing. othersbelieve that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
no one can deny that some people think that
competition
is a good thing. While
others believe that we should try to cooperate. it is important to admit that both
views have their own benefits. In this
essay, I will discuss the possible reasons
that support each view, and what benefits they bring to society. In my opinion
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opinion,
both
views
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view
is
a good thing and I would like to explain why I support Correct subject-verb agreement
are
both
.
on the one hand, the option to think that competition
is good
thing has its benefits for many convincing Add an article
a good
reasons
. one of many reasons
is when we have a competition
we become more excited because in the competition
we can get rewards if we win. For
example
to illustrate Add a comma
example,
that is
when we were in junior or senior high school, we were doing competition
with our classmates and in the final semester our teacher announced who are
got the first rank, second rank or third rank in class or on the field of school in front of all student, we must be proud of ourselves if we are the winner in the Unnecessary verb
apply
competition
, we being confident, we got the medal and watched by a lot of students.
on the other hand
, desive
above the arguments, Correct your spelling
decisive
the
my way of thinking, there are many Remove the article
apply
reasons
why some people believe that cooperation is a good thing. The most important reason is if we try to cooperate, we have team works
and the result must be maximal. Correct your spelling
teamwork
For instance
, in the office or school, we be
cooperative, we can discuss something that we Change the verb form
are
dont
know, we can share an experience with each other, we can talk about a problem that we have with our boss and Correct your spelling
don't
then
solve it together.
In conclusion, Competition
and cooperation have their own positive sides and I believe that both
are a
good things. Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
competition
is good because makes us more confident and powerful. Moreover
, cooperation allows us to have a good discussion for solving any problems.Submitted by arniaqlina44 on
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task achievement
Try to elaborate more on the examples and provide a deeper analysis. For example, in the second main point, you can explain how cooperation has helped you or someone else personally.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that there are smooth transitions between paragraphs and within paragraphs. Use linking words and phrases to connect ideas more effectively.
language
Watch for grammatical consistency and make sure to use varied sentence structures. For example, instead of repeating 'is a good thing,' you can say 'offers significant advantages.'
content
The essay clearly addresses both sides of the argument, providing a fair discussion on the topic.
structure
The introduction and conclusion are present and clearly demarcate the start and end of the essay, which is crucial for maintaining coherence.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.