Some people hold that we should spend money and time on the protection of wild animals while others suggest that the money should be spent on populations living in the poorest areas of the world. What is your opinion

It is true that many people argue that people could waste capital and time on protecting of animals. Meanwhile, some people believe that we should spend funds on people who are poverty in the global. Personally, I agree with the
second
point. On the one hand, people who believe that we should spend money on protecting of animals base their opinion on several reasons.
Firstly
, protecting animals can help with regulation of the environment.
For example
, animals eat each other to making recycling nature. If they are dying, circulation nature would be broke.
Therefore
, it can lead to climate change.
Secondly
, animals can help to find kind of the medical in them.
For instance
, nowadays, experts use animals to test to find
medical
Suggestion
medications
to treatment
such
as test vaccines in
mouses
Suggestion
mice
.
On the other hand
, I believe that we should waste capital on poverty people.
Firstly
, spending cash for poor people can make a their living
.
Accept space
.
Government spends fund to build new houses to people who are poor.
Therefore
, they can live a good condition and they can concentrate on working to make money.
Secondly
, the poorest people are labour and make country development in the economy.
For example
, government can create
to
being one more than one
two
jobs for people by constructing companies
such
as shoe companies or clothing companies. As the results, with development
economic
Suggestion
economist
,
Accept space
,
a country can take part in market integration in the world. In conclusion,
although
both views certainly have some vadility, it seems to me
that is
is better to spending monney to poverty people
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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