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Some people think teaching children with different abilities together benefits everyone, others think intelligent children should be taught separately and given special treatment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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According to some,
stydying
reading carefully with intent to remember
studying
 together have a positive affection
on
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of
for
 children, even if kids have a various abilities for studying. Whereas some consider that kids ought to be divided
in
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into
 classes by their mental capacities.
This
 essay will discuss a positive and negative aspects of both views.
To begin
 with,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 consider that kids might be relocated for classes by
theirs
of them or themselves
their
 abilities, and it will be more comfortable for them to
absorbing
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absorb
 new information. Nobody will bully
this children
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these children
this child
 because of
theirs
of them or themselves
their
 mental abilities.
Secondly
, communication with kids at the same stage of development is easier for children. They will not have any doubts about
theirs
of them or themselves
their
 abilities if kids have the equal rights.
On the other hand
, kids might not see competitions and may stop seeing causes for their own mental development. If the whole class
contain
Suggestion
contains
 the students with various mental abilities, other children
,
Accept space
,
 with less strong potential, will begin to strive the others. To conclude,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 consider that children ought to study together without regards of
theirs
of them or themselves
their
 mental abilities and potential.
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