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Marriage is seen as animportant part of life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of marrying a person at a young age? Explain.

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A matter of considerable controversy at present is the issue of whether getting married earlier or waiting right time. Strong arguments exist in support of both sides of
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 debate, which implies that it is worth examining both points of view before reaching any conclusions. One obvious advantage of establishing a family is that young males and females have a chance to create any event romantic, awesome and incredible which can assist to explore each other’s character and discover personalities in order to make a close-knit family. An additional benefit to the issue is that individual can feel more responsible for the forthcoming life and obligations for inhabiting, covering the living expenses and bringing up children well. A good example that springs to my mind here is that those couples get married when they are 18-24 years old tend to be happier than those who marry after turning 30 years old which can give higher chances of becoming happy and enjoying family life.
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, the idea of waiting right time to make a family should not
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 be neglected, as it adds more weight in support of the argument.
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, there is one very convincing point against the getting married at a young age.
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 common criticism of missing out on the fun of teenage life, with the opponents pointing out to the not living as a normal child as others who are at the same age. Eventually, claims that are bringing up children may be difficult for the young parents, since their knowledge of child care and attention to children may not be enough. All things considered, my subjective view on
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 contentious issue is to make a family and share burdens and responsibilities early that can lead to less stress (financial or emotional).
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