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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals prefer to explore new
things
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 as visiting different
places
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 and eating different cuisines, others prefer to do
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 they are aware of as they do not want to go out of their comfort zone. In my opinion, trying new
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 gives exposure to the culture and the
people
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. Exploring different
places
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 gives knowledge about history. Visiting different
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 and exploring a variety of historical monuments provide insights into how
people
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 used to live in the past.
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, exploring different cultural foods not only enhances the taste but
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 helps us to understand their cultures.
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, I recently went to Montreal where I tasted their famous poutine and explored the oldest church, expanding my knowledge about French culture and food.
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, some
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 do not want to spend their money on
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things
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 they do not know because they think it might be a waste of their money as there is an uncertainty of not liking it.
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, some
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 do not want to go to Chinese or Korean restaurants for Ramen or sushi because they are afraid that they
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 not like it and end up wasting money.
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,
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 want to be in their comfort zone as it gives them a sense of security and validation. In conclusion, some want to be in their comfort zone, so they prefer to do
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 they know.
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, I believe that individuals should prefer to explore new
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 and food because it expands their knowledge about different cultures and
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.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. A stronger link between arguments can enhance readability.
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Make sure to address counterarguments more thoroughly, possibly by providing examples or further elaboration.
task achievement
The essay effectively introduces the topic and provides a reasoned argument with a balanced discussion on both perspectives.
coherence cohesion
A clear introduction and conclusion wrap the discussion up neatly, providing a complete response to the prompt.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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