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Some people believe that there should be a law which prevents young people under the age of 18 being outside after midnight. Do you agree or disagree?

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Teenagers should be allowed to go outside at midnight or not is a controversial issue these days. Some argue that the government should impose stringent laws to restrict young people from going out late at night. I think laws are, undoubtedly, necessary for their safety and security, but I
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 believe, freedom is important too for them to a certain extent. On the one hand, I acknowledge, strict regulation should be enacted by the highest authority, particularly, people under the age of 18 for their safety.
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 is because drinking is prevalent among teenagers. Having attended late-night parties often they have to drive home so accidents are likely to happen as they are not conscious enough while driving.
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, the recent article by the Government of UK reported that car accidents are increased by 20% in the midnight due to driving by teenagers in alcoholic condition and
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 has resulted in the death of many youngsters.
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, even though the rules are indispensable for the young people’s security and safety, I would argue that freedom is utmost important in their lives, which is the preliminary right of every human being. In
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 21st century, it is really difficult to control them with
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 a harsh rule. If they are completely restricted from attending late-night parties, they will averse it, become less socialized and can start telling lies to their parents. In conclusion,
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 I concede that government rules are beneficial for their defence, I believe, being at liberty is their right as a human being which enables them to become socialized.
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