Its advatages or disadvantages: The government bans alcohol consumption?

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Alcohol harm directly people consuming. If people intake infrequently a small amount of liquor, it will be good for health.
However
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, it could be hardly controlled after starting.
day
Suggestion
Day
by day, alcohol could destroy health. A
further
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matter is alcohol could bring about numerous harm to society. Not only can
drunkers
a person who drinks liquids
drinkers
harm directly or indirectly themselves, but
also
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do it other people and society.
Drunkeness
Suggestion
Drunkenness
is reckoned cause of many problems and even
crimials
someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime
criminals
crimes
,
such
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as traffic collisions, murder, rape, disturb
pulic
not private; open to or concerning the people as a whole
public
order… Because people become to be incited easier due to the influence of alcohol.
For instance
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,in most of Vietnamese national holidays, the death and injured rate which is regarding consume liquor, significantly raising up
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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