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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extend do you agree with this statement?

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Money
 investment by
government
 is one of the critical arguments nowadays. There are those who are in fa
vor o
promote over another
favour
f investing
money
 in cultural and heritage values.
However
, many commentators are of the view that it must be invested in public services. I tend to believe that there must be some amount of investment into our museums,
music
, and theatre, which enhances the historical-cultural values, but at the same time, public services should not be ignored. There are several reasons for spending a significant amount of
money
 on Public services.
Firstly
, there is a need to improvising public transport into the city. In some countries, these services are provided by private companies to improve the quality of public transport while controlling the price.
Secondly
, education and healthcare must be improved.
For instance
, they can provide resources in
government
 schools for the betterment of those who are not privileged to study in higher class private schools. Unfortunately,
this
 is something that the
government
 is not looking forward to.
On the other hand
, it is equally important to spend
money
 on conservation of the ar
cheological s
related to or dealing with or devoted to archaeology
archaeological
ecological
ites, mo
ral cultural v
Accept comma addition
moral, cultural
alues fo
r
Suggestion
of
music
, art, and theatre.
To begin
 with, it is very difficult for some art and
music
institutes
 to cope up without help from the
government
.
As a result
, many primitive
institutes
 have been closing these days. Adding to
this
, arts, and other related
institutes
 play a vital role in our lives. Many people get pleasure in going to see the
music
 and theatre and
thus
 it is a prime responsibility of the
government
 to provide funds and they can
then
 continue to entertain individuals. To summarize, both sides of the argument are equally strong. As the issue with public services are more and there are clear benefits of investments goes into public services as
this
 influences the quality of life for nearly all of us.
Although
, I do not believe that providing funds to the art and
music
institutes
 is a waste of
money
.
Submitted by Mili Prajapati on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural enrichment
  • expression of creativity
  • promote diversity
  • enhance social cohesion
  • boost tourism
  • job creation
  • stimulate economic growth
  • improve quality of life
  • essential services
  • maintenance and development
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