Our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to change our character traits.

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It is often said that every

individuals

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individual's

individual

individuals'

behaviours are innate and are linked with

heriditary

occurring among members of a family usually by heredity

hereditary

elements

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however it

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however, it

preresumed

take to be the case or to be true; accept without verification or proof

presumed

that natural

personality

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can not

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changed. To some extend, do not agree with the above stated statement.

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consider

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considers

human

personality

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is variable but not constant. To

embrak

include in scope; include as part of something broader; have as one's sphere or territory

embrace

all, god

have created

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has created

this

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universe and all inhabitant are different from each other.

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is true that we are born with certain natural qualities which are difficult to alter.

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addition it

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addition, it

obivious creature

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an obvious creature

obvious creature

oblivious creature

universe

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the universe

have to go with seven stages of life from childhood to an adulthood and so on.

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the

qualites

an essential and distinguishing attribute of something or someone

qualities

cults

of various

development

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developments

and quality we get

althought

the content of cognition; the main thing you are thinking about

thought

from our

gaurdian

a plot of ground where plants are cultivated

garden

gardens

and from senior peers as they grow we discover innate

personality

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traits.

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, while learning some developments mentors are investing

there

of them or themselves

their

efforts in multiple access and studying

there

of them or themselves

their

natural

personnel

a short newspaper article about a particular person or group

personal

traits. To illustrate many parents

stated

stay the same; remain in a certain state

stayed

at school for

enrollment

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process,

child

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a child

the child

is born with

variable

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a variable personality

personality

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which

can not

cannot

be unchanged.

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instructor

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the instructor

instructors

an instructor

keep

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keeps

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eye on each kid behaviour in the classroom and discuss training plan

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and

such

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plan

are

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so smart as it is trained to overcome their natural shyness. To summarize,

personality

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traits are subjected to change but it depends on our society and requirement

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Althought

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Thought

is true that some natural habit

are remain

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remains

same because it is

universal truth

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a universal truth

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

233 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

predetermined
character traits
genetic influence
environmental factors
personality development
upbringing
foundation
evolution of traits

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Our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to change our character traits.

Word Count

In many countries students take a year off after finishing school and work or travel during this period. Should students take a gap year before attending universities? What are the advantages and disadvantages of it?

Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

Universities and colleges are now offering courses through distance learning from the Internet rather than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Today’s fresh food like vegetables or fruits travels thousands of miles from the rural areas or farms before it reaches customers in cities or urban areas. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative trend?

In some countries, online shopping is getting more popular and replacing shopping in stores. Do the advantages of online shopping outweigh the disadvantages?