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Some people think that media have the right to publish details of people's private lives, while others think it should be controlled. Discuss both views.

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People’s private lives are published everywhere in the media, and many of them have not any accept of people, whose face shows to everybody. All of the information is related with someone must have the assent of that person before publish to. Because of
this
 publishing will affect to their life in some way. Maybe good, but the curious nature of the human will drive them to the bad news, ridiculous thing and often makes the people whose face have given feel ashamed. So I think the right to publish details of people’s private lives should be controlled.
This
 activity in order to protect the normal life of the people. In case of the news become badly after each communication, some victim of that can be tired, depressed, and maybe the worst is suicide or kill someone. Even in case of the news become better and better after publishing, many people
also
 don’t want to be unwilling famous. So that, in my opinion, everything which related to someone before published must have the approval of that person.
Submitted by Thanh Tùng Nguyễn on

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